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Article #60461Re: me chinese concubine rewrite by ying
From: yyyiii...@yahoo.
Date: Sat, 15 Nov 2003 02:55
Date: Sat, 15 Nov 2003 02:55
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"Chandra P. Das" <vze1...@verizon.net> wrote in message news:<F_itb.623$3o6...@nwrdny01.gnilink.net>... > Dr. Flonkenstein wrote: > > > Being tired of lurking, on Sat, 15 Nov 2003 01:03:07 +0000, Chandra P. Das > > posted: > > > > > >>yyyiii...@yahoo.com wrote: > >> > >>>me chinese concubine > >>>==================================================================== > >>> > >>>Isabelle will make a pair of pants for ying for forty dollars. She > >>>finished measurements with a compliment, "your skin is so soft..." Two > >>>hands met in the air, rubbing side to side, with differentiated > >>>pressure, swirling. They say nipples are windows of heart. Suffocation > >>>is a way of accumulation... > >>> > >>>Life is random. Isabelle is the third woman came to ying1s life since > >>>the new year. Each of them has a boyfriend. > >>> > >>>Eva always leaves quarter to eight in the evening taking metro to work. > >>>Melanie has Cinderella syndrome that she must be back by midnight. > >>>Isabelle stays over about once a week reminding ying how two other > >>>girls' boyfriends would hold them fall asleep then wake them up with > >>>morning kisses or may be a poem just finished before the sky turns > >>>white. > >>> > >>>Gender roles started switching since the new year of 1996. The whole > >>>world got mad about how women will pick up men and sleep around. > >>> > >>>This is a Sunday morning, Isabelle is sitting in a restaurant couldn1t > >>>decide what to order for breakfast. Melanie is running around naked > >>>gathering laundry. Eva is still asleep. she faces the wall, her > >>>boyfriend faces the window. > >>> > >>>ying is sitting in front of the window, wondering why street lights > >>>could outshine the sun in the morning... > >> > >>Keep the last sentence-- everything else is unsalvageable junk. Seriously, > >>I don't know what else to say but that this is just scatter-brained crap. > >>It doesn't even make for interesting diary-entry prose. It's awful, yingo. > >>Let's not even go into the grammar and syntax errors. This is just another > >>rendition of the hackneyed teen-angst thought process in a sort of > >>unimaginative, spaced out way. Yawn. It's not the language mistakes that > >>makes this piece unbearable to read. It just sucks. Sorry. Lastly: I don't > >>see how this is a 'rewrite' of what you posted seven years ago. You've sat > >>on this for seven years?? Christ! You need to pull your head out of your > >>ass, stop babbling like a manic drunkard and start reading some poetry and > >>prose, kiddo. You're not even good enough to be called a beginner yet. > >>HTH. Good luck. > > > > > > Some friend/relative/family sent me this email. > > I've received two emails so far (see my other post) from his distant > cousin who was highly concerned about yingkook's perversions with > minors. He'll be behind bars in a matter of weeks. Let's just hope he > doesn't rape any more 11 year olds as his final farewell stunt or some > sick thing like that. > isn't altering flanker's stats a lot easier than making these up from scratch? ying > > But the conotation is that none of these girls was aged more than 11 yrs > > at that time. > > ying is a notorious child abuser and should have been jailed since long. > >
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