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Re: me chinese concubine rewrite by ying

#60461
From: yyyiii...@yahoo.
Date: Sat, 15 Nov 2003 02:55
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"Chandra P. Das" <vze1...@verizon.net> wrote in message news:<F_itb.623$3o6...@nwrdny01.gnilink.net>...
> Dr. Flonkenstein wrote:
> 
> > Being tired of lurking, on Sat, 15 Nov 2003 01:03:07 +0000, Chandra P. Das
> > posted:
> > 
> > 
> >>yyyiii...@yahoo.com wrote:
> >>
> >>>me chinese concubine
> >>>====================================================================
> >>>
> >>>Isabelle will make a pair of pants for ying for forty dollars. She
> >>>finished measurements with a compliment, "your skin is so soft..." Two
> >>>hands met in the air, rubbing side to side, with differentiated
> >>>pressure, swirling. They say nipples are windows of heart. Suffocation
> >>>is a way of accumulation...
> >>>
> >>>Life is random. Isabelle is the third woman came to ying1s life since
> >>>the new year. Each of them has a boyfriend.
> >>>
> >>>Eva always leaves quarter to eight in the evening taking metro to work.
> >>>Melanie has Cinderella syndrome that she must be back by midnight.
> >>>Isabelle stays over about once a week reminding ying how two other
> >>>girls' boyfriends would hold them fall asleep then wake them up with
> >>>morning kisses or may be a poem just finished before the sky turns
> >>>white.
> >>>
> >>>Gender roles started switching since the new year of 1996. The whole
> >>>world got mad about how women will pick up men and sleep around.
> >>>
> >>>This is a Sunday morning, Isabelle is sitting in a restaurant couldn1t
> >>>decide what to order for breakfast. Melanie is running around naked
> >>>gathering laundry. Eva is still asleep. she faces the wall, her
> >>>boyfriend faces the window.
> >>>
> >>>ying is sitting in front of the window, wondering why street lights
> >>>could outshine the sun in the morning...
> >>
> >>Keep the last sentence-- everything else is unsalvageable junk. Seriously,
> >>I don't know what else to say but that this is just scatter-brained crap.
> >>It doesn't even make for interesting diary-entry prose. It's awful, yingo.
> >>Let's not even go into the grammar and syntax errors. This is just another
> >>rendition of the hackneyed teen-angst thought process in a sort of
> >>unimaginative, spaced out way. Yawn. It's not the language mistakes that
> >>makes this piece unbearable to read. It just sucks. Sorry. Lastly: I don't
> >>see how this is a 'rewrite' of what you posted seven years ago. You've sat
> >>on this for seven years?? Christ! You need to pull your head out of your
> >>ass, stop babbling like a manic drunkard and start reading some poetry and
> >>prose, kiddo. You're not even good enough to be called a beginner yet.
> >>HTH. Good luck.
> > 
> > 
> > Some friend/relative/family sent me this email.
> 
> I've received two emails so far (see my other post) from his distant
> cousin who was highly concerned about yingkook's perversions with
> minors. He'll be behind bars in a matter of weeks. Let's just hope he
> doesn't rape any more 11 year olds as his final farewell stunt or some
> sick thing like that.
> 
isn't altering flanker's stats a lot easier than making these up from scratch?

ying

> > But the conotation is that none of these girls was aged more than 11 yrs
> > at that time. 
> > ying is a notorious child abuser and should have been jailed since long. 
> >

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