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Re: Tongue

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From: NancyGene
Date: Sun, 24 Jul 2022 18:12
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On Monday, July 25, 2022 at 1:11:04 AM UTC, ME wrote:
> On Sunday, 24 July 2022 at 20:30:18 UTC-4, NancyGene wrote: 
> > On Sunday, July 24, 2022 at 10:59:06 PM UTC, blackpo...@aol.com wrote: 
> > > Tongue 
> > > 
> > > That majestic muscle 
> > > flickering as if a Diamond Back 
> > > looking for scent and heat, 
> > > corners the prey 
> > > who gives up 
> > > without a fight 
> > > but whimper. 
> > > 
> > > Edward Rochester Esq. 
> > We like this, but think that the last line should be "but with a whimper."
> What about β€œbut with a deep guttural moan”?
What about "but with a scream of yes! yes! yes!"

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