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Re: The Ashtroll / gjd

#820344
From: "George J. Dance
Date: Thu, 09 Jun 2022 15:56
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On 2022-06-09 12:19 a.m., W.Dockery wrote:
> Rocky Stoneberg wrote:
>
>> George J. Dance wrote:
>
>>> On 2022-06-07 7:51 p.m., W.Dockery wrote:
>>>> Rocky Stoneberg wrote:
>>>>
>>>>> George J. Dance wrote:
>>>>>>
>>>>>> A wannabe poet named Ash
>>>>>> Thought writing could bring in some cash;
>>>>>> But all of his verses
>>>>>> Brought him only curses,
>>>>>> And all of it went in the trash.
>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> gjd
>>>>
>>>>> Outstanding work in the limerick form...
>>>>
>>>> Even PJR might approve.
>>>>
>>>> 🙂
>
>>> PJ Ross has actually commented on it:
>>> 'Close, but no cigar. Forced stress on "him".'
>
>>> Both this and the "Bobby Burro" limerick were ones I wrote earlier in
>>> the year, in threads where they're effectively lost to posterity. So
>>> I decided to top-post them so they'd be easier to find.
>
>> Peter is always a tough critic, I daresay....
>
> But when he gets serious, PJR does post some instructional thoughts.

He was always worth listening to. But one doesn't have to agree with
*him*, and here I listened and then disagreed.

It's not normal, but it's not unnatural (and therefore not forced) for a
person to stress "him" in such a context. Imagine, for example, pointing
to the person when you're saying it.

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