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Re: PPB: Silk Diamond / George Sulzbach

#804217
From: tzod9964@gmail.c
Date: Thu, 31 Mar 2022 16:53
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Rachel wrote:

> On Thursday, February 24, 2022 at 2:45:22 PM UTC-5, Rachel wrote:
>> On Thursday, February 24, 2022 at 11:38:49 AM UTC-8, Rachel wrote:
>> > On Tuesday, February 22, 2022 at 4:02:07 PM UTC-8, Zod wrote:
>
>> > > > > Moon Water Dance
>> > > > >
>> > > > > Negativity of the past
>> > > > > taints my future.
>> > > > > Implanted between
>> > > > > the buttons.
>> > > > >
>> > > > > Oh, Fate
>> > > > > bring me answers.
>> > > > > To the questions
>> > > > > I cannot bear to ask.
>> > > > >
>> > > > > Enchanted time
>> > > > > sitting on a bank of sand.
>> > > > > Aquatic energy flows
>> > > > > Eternal balance
>> > > > > Of molecules moving.
>> > > > >
>> > > > > To my eyes
>> > > > > from the night sky.
>> > > > > I watch the Moon dance
>> > > > > over Venus.
>> > > > >
>> > > > > -------------------
>> > > > > Poem by General Zod (emendment by Rachel)
>> > >
>> > > Hello Rachel...
>> > I don't like 5 lines though.
>> >
>> > What if you took out the Dylan nod altogether?
>> >
>> > Enchanted time
>> > Aquatic energy flows
>> > Eternal balance
>> > Of molecules moving.
>> > ?
>> i don't know. i don't want to mess with your poem. i feel like i'm gutting it out.
>>
>> just forget it.

> I likes your input, R....!

> Thanks G. As I mentioned, I came back around a while ago, and liked it best in your own finalized version, before I started screwing around with it. :)

Hi RACHEL.... wish you were here at the camp with Mike and me,. having a party of all parties tonight....

Hope Doc will journey down this way as well....

Watching the River flow.....!

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