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Article #60554Re: Combat Zone. by Will Dockery
From: yyyiiinnnggg@yah
Date: Sat, 15 Nov 2003 11:02
Date: Sat, 15 Nov 2003 11:02
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Rob Evans <rre@mla001.demon.co.uk> wrote in message news:<goJoJHTqagt$Ewq7@mla001.demon.co.uk>... > In message <670584bc.0311150133.47a8ab96@posting.google.com>, > yyyiiinnnggg@yahoo.com writes > >> > >hey rob, when was your first post? > > > God knows. I was lurking around RAP almost since its inception but I > God must. it was only 1997. Do you remember this is one of your early posts? Wasn't Tim Peddyson anno*ying? My point is who are you to tell me about rap history? ying Rob Evans wrote: > > In article <8E4cPHA58WOzEwiE@mla001.demon.co.uk>, Rob Evans > <Rob@mla001.demon.co.uk> re-writes with one slight alteration > >Antipasto Torino > > > >Fresh black pepper, > >ground coarsely over > >a finely-chopped mixture > >of rockett and tomato, > >olive oil and oregano, > >all lightly drizzled onto > >thin translucent pieces > >of oak-smoked swordfish, > >resting on a bed of crisp > >dark green lettuce > >on a plain white plate > >in the slim bronzed hand > >of a long-legged, > >henna-headed > >sweet surprise > >with wide brown eyes, > >warm enough to melt the ice > >in my campari-soda. > > > Thanks to those who commented - I think replacing tan with thin in the > seventh line does make it easier to read out (although I don't know > why). To those who feel that the rhythm stumbles in the fifth line, I > can only say that this is due to differences in US/UK pronunciation. The > former stress the reg in oregano whereas the latter stress the gan. > > Rob > -- > Rob Evans You could also place "of rockett and tomato" with "rughetta and tomato" if you wanted to use the Italian and impress the easily impressed ;) (Although rughetta sounds so much nicer and works well with "mixture" in the preceding line too, so it does have some poetic value too :) Tim who can't find rughetta at any of his local supermarkets :( > can't remember when I first posted, though I'm pretty sure it wasn't > with windows-based software. Is it possible to google back to RAP's big > bang? > > Rob
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