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"Will Dockery" <will_d...@outlook.com> wrote:
> Skirt of Printed Sunflowers


> under the skirts of printed sunflowers.
> in a skirt of printed pastel sunflowers.
> you and your skirt of bright printed sunflowers.
> in your skirt of printed sunflowers.

What's distracting to this unpracticed poetry reader is that
in these four lines you have three different descriptions of
the skirt of printed sunflowers.  So I slow down and ask
myself: why?  It would seem to sing more if you removed
"pastel" and "bright".  But you must have a reason for
putting those words in there.  I'm curious.  What is that
reason?

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